tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5641117771707843067.post1084993950088433206..comments2024-02-05T15:01:44.563-05:00Comments on Cleveland Poetics: a place for cleveland's writers and readers: Blind Review Fridaymichael salingerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14717310933948991992noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5641117771707843067.post-32020152774702661122008-10-21T17:03:00.000-04:002008-10-21T17:03:00.000-04:00I remember seeing this poet perform at SLC my seni...I remember seeing this poet perform at SLC my senior year. He said that one of his nightmares was all of his ex-girlfriends getting together and realizing that the poem he wrote for each one of them was the exact same poem.<BR/><BR/>What struck me about this poem is that it's very simple. It's a nice idea, and the tone is effective, especially in the last stanza with the ache of loneliness and sacrifice, as well as the irony that he's speaking over the telephone. However, outside of the first stanza, there's not much depth to this piece, in terms of idea, social concern, etc. Perhaps that is the social concern--government imposition and the human reaction--but it seems a bit of a stretch.<BR/><BR/>The question is, of course, is all that necessary. Can one simply write a solid love poem, and leave it at that? Can that be the only connection to humanity in the poem, even a performance/slam poem such as this? Do poets have a greater responsibility? Should they? Do they need to adhere to that responsibility in every poem?<BR/><BR/>I don't see why not, and with that this is obviously a very successful piece and clearly resonates with the audience, but it's something to consider or think about.pottygokhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03530399360457624135noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5641117771707843067.post-25397059459197646772008-10-19T13:58:00.000-04:002008-10-19T13:58:00.000-04:00Michael's quite right, if the poem itself were 167...Michael's quite right, if the poem itself were 167 words, that would give it a pleasing self-referential symmetry... on the other hand, as it is, the brevity is a strong part of its appeal-- the point is made, and no more words were needed... maybe line four/five could be modified to one hundred and thirty seven?Geoffrey A. Landishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04518496779546782434noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5641117771707843067.post-13447306921281888892008-10-18T17:39:00.000-04:002008-10-18T17:39:00.000-04:00i know who it is.i know who it is.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5641117771707843067.post-75743403831025316832008-10-18T10:03:00.000-04:002008-10-18T10:03:00.000-04:00What a poem, and what a gently-stated challenge-- ...What a poem, and what a gently-stated challenge-- to write and speak more succinctly, more economically. I love this poem, and know that I will find myself thinking about it when I'm writing mine. Thank you for posting this one, Michael. Kudos to the author!Dianne Borsenikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03228377373966856818noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5641117771707843067.post-68484136973114815522008-10-17T14:25:00.000-04:002008-10-17T14:25:00.000-04:00Interesting.Beautiful.It reminds me as a writer I ...Interesting.<BR/>Beautiful.<BR/><BR/>It reminds me as a writer I should be choosing my words and not let them just fall out of my mouth.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5641117771707843067.post-22002035464474303602008-10-17T13:18:00.000-04:002008-10-17T13:18:00.000-04:00i love Salinger's take!i love the poem.unfortunate...i love Salinger's take!<BR/>i love the poem.<BR/>unfortunately,i think the gov't<BR/>would prefer we remain detatched<BR/>and disconnected,rather than<BR/>connected by eye contact...but there's an election coming...tune IN!Pressin Onhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02875715937095082907noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5641117771707843067.post-2904193235793394382008-10-17T12:08:00.000-04:002008-10-17T12:08:00.000-04:00haha! I absolutely love this! and it's not only ...haha! <BR/><BR/>I absolutely love this! and it's not only fun...it makes all of us who tend towards the verbose want to choose our words more precisely :)Theresa Göttl Brightmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04268724583965572272noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5641117771707843067.post-4120856101477516752008-10-17T12:01:00.000-04:002008-10-17T12:01:00.000-04:00the only disappointment I find in this poem is tha...the only disappointment I find in this poem is that it is only 137 words long – thirty more words and it might well be perfect.michael salingerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14717310933948991992noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5641117771707843067.post-42090928458159792572008-10-17T11:49:00.000-04:002008-10-17T11:49:00.000-04:00I like this a lot! Might be my favorite poem by t...I like this a lot! Might be my favorite poem by this particular person....Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5641117771707843067.post-45675175301618627262008-10-17T10:55:00.000-04:002008-10-17T10:55:00.000-04:00That's fun, I like it! Very science-fictional.That's fun, I like it! <BR/><BR>Very science-fictional.Geoffrey A. Landishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04518496779546782434noreply@blogger.com