tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5641117771707843067.post3736465097072227163..comments2024-02-05T15:01:44.563-05:00Comments on Cleveland Poetics: a place for cleveland's writers and readers: Blind Review Fridaymichael salingerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14717310933948991992noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5641117771707843067.post-13292191965004490192009-01-25T17:14:00.000-05:002009-01-25T17:14:00.000-05:00Common tone for the common man it's about. ok, i a...Common tone for the common man it's about. ok, i agree with that.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5641117771707843067.post-62414380427329785982009-01-24T23:00:00.000-05:002009-01-24T23:00:00.000-05:00I really like the idea of this poem. "Such an idea...I really like the idea of this poem. <BR/><BR/>"Such an idea was foreign<BR/>To dairy farmers<BR/>tied to the teats<BR/>Of too many waiting heifers,<BR/>Chewing cuds, bored<BR/>By the presumption<BR/>of the farmer’s calloused hands;"<BR/><BR/>To me, this is the best part of the whole thing. The image that it presents really pulls me in. <BR/><BR/>There are a couple of places where the language gets confused, though. What I mean is, the majority of the poem is in very common spoken language, but then, in places it uses words that feel like they're trying to hard to be 'poemy' and a little high-falutin. I'd suggest for it to stick with the common tone. It works better for the subject matter.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5641117771707843067.post-10839162881049018632009-01-23T21:11:00.000-05:002009-01-23T21:11:00.000-05:00I found the line breaks a little distracting-- I t...I found the line breaks a little distracting-- I think you should try it without the imposed breaksAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com