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Last review's offering of "All Summer Long" is written by Carol Frost - this weeks selection is also from an established author:
September Song
born 19.6.32 - deported 24.9.42
Undesirable you may have been, untouchable
you were not. Not forgotten
or passed over at the proper time.
As estimated, you died. Things marched,
sufficient, to that end.
Just so much Zyklon and leather, patented
terror, so many routine cries.
(I have made
an elegy for myself it
is true)
September fattens on vines. Roses
flake from the wall. The smoke
of harmless fires drifts to my eyes.
This is plenty. This is more than enough.
4 comments:
Great juxtaposition of imagery, but at the end I'm not sure what it's about.
Untouchables-- India?
Zyklon is the lethal gas the Nazis used in the concentration camps. The poem is about Holocaust victims.
I believe the first line of the poem is missing; it should start:
born 19.6.32 - deported 24.9.42
Putting the first line in would make the subject a little less obscure.
"I believe the first line of the poem is missing; "
Not just a belief at all Geoff - a fact, as you knew.
Thanks for the catch - a cut and paste error on my part for which I apologize and have corrected.
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